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The door swung open . . .

9/5/2011

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Rachel Harrie over at Rach Writes is hosting the first of several campaign challenges. And for those of you who know me well, I'm not one to back down from a challenge. Bring it on. I'm ready.

The rules: write a 200 word passage that begins with these words, "The door swung open." To make it even more challenging, though not necessary to the contest, she suggests trying to write it in EXACTLY 200 words and close with "The door swung shut." Both phrases are included in the word count. Now, if you didn't sign up to be a Campaigner, you can still participate. Yes you can. You can check out other entries here: First Campaign Challenge. Oh, and this time, you can vote for the entries you like the most--there's an award for the people's choice along with other goodies as well. (So if you like mine, which I hope you will, then pop over to Rach's and click the little LIKE button under my face. #31).

The reason I love the challenges, it gets my brain up and moving. It forces me to think and get out of my comfort zone. Anything that gets the creative juices flowing is a'right by me. I need the push. Also, it was a nice break from all the editing I've been doing lately. Oh, and did I mention prizes? I like prizes.

So here is my entry. And yes, it is EXACTLY 200 words (Excluding the title) and yes, I started and ended the piece with the suggested phrases:

PISSED
by Angela Scott

The door swung open and he found me standing in the middle of the damp room, waiting for him. Chained and naked, the way he left me, but not afraid like he fully expected.

I’m sure others had cowered in the dark corner, scared and uncertain. Others begged for their release, making promises not to tell. Most probably cried. All perfectly understandable instincts when faced with self-preservation. If I was that kind of girl, I’d react the same.

Except I wasn’t that kind of girl at all.

His misshapen brows pulled together in a hard line across his forehead as he sat my tray of food on the makeshift table to his left. He crossed his arms over his chest and watched me, his eyes raking over my nakedness, perhaps in hopes of breaking my bravado.  

He didn’t know who he was dealing with; I wasn’t breakable.

His shoulders lowered a fraction before a smile crept over his thin lips. I smiled too, an equally perverse smile to match his own.

“So this is how you want to play it? Huh, pet?”

My eyes never left his. “I can’t imagine playing it any other way.”

And the door swung closed.


42 Comments
Juliana link
9/5/2011 01:50:40 am

Damn Angela, turn this into a not flash fiction piece. Nice job!

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Elizabeth Stilborn link
9/5/2011 02:01:32 am

What Juliana said. It would be interesting to see where this goes.

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Jennifer Groepl link
9/5/2011 02:42:09 am

Certainly gets the imagination going! Wow. I can picture this scene going all sorts of crazy ways!

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1000th.monkey link
9/5/2011 03:33:09 am

wow, similar subject matter to mine... way different take on it... Nice!

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Nadja Notariani link
9/5/2011 03:50:41 am

I really liked this! The 'victim' becomes the one in control. Good stuff. Very dark... ~ Nadja

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Alleged Author
9/5/2011 04:29:09 am

Love the whole idea of her being unbreakable. Great job!

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Jan May link
9/5/2011 05:14:09 am

loving it.... Now I want to read the rest! Oh, but I'm so tempted to join in. Will definitely be following.

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tara tyler link
9/5/2011 07:54:59 am

i cant believe they caught her! i bet its part of her plan! clever girl!
nice piece of writing =)

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Ruth Hartman Berge link
9/5/2011 08:02:56 am

Loved the attitude! Would make a great longer story!

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Susannah link
9/5/2011 10:51:21 am

Love, love, love this. Of course, you must now tell us the rest of the story!

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Jessica Love link
9/5/2011 11:27:13 am

Nice job! :-D

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Abby Fowers link
9/5/2011 11:46:00 am

WOW! This is great. I'm glad she's not "that kind of girl." Very compelling. Great job.

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bridgetstraub.com link
9/5/2011 11:53:24 am

I love a character who has guts. Well done! Mine is #72

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Angie Cothran link
9/5/2011 12:37:30 pm

I would love to read a full book with this character. This would be a great start. Loved it :)

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Elana Johnson link
9/5/2011 01:09:47 pm

This has a creep factor I really enjoy. Well done. :)

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mish link
9/6/2011 01:03:07 am

This is soooo good !
Simple , in-your-face ... loved your pacing too ...

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Brinda link
9/6/2011 02:19:49 am

WOW. That's a very scary piece of writing. It sent chills from my head to my toes. :) Terrific work.

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David Powers King link
9/6/2011 06:39:43 am

Nice, Angela! A gripping start to something big. Love your character. :)

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Gwen link
9/6/2011 07:05:36 am

Yay, girl power! Loved your scene - great job! I'm a new follower:)

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Christine Rains link
9/6/2011 11:30:48 am

Oh, I love it! Strong women are the protagonists that I crave to read about. Great job!

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Kari Marie link
9/6/2011 11:34:44 am

Excellent flash fiction piece. Loved the attitude and the creepy nature of it!

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Doreen link
9/6/2011 05:09:01 pm

I loved this character...

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Catherine Johnson link
9/6/2011 11:46:04 pm

Wow Angela, you have an amazing imagination. Great how you gave such confidence to the protag under such gruelling conditions too. Nice one!

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Rebecca Enzor link
9/7/2011 12:13:42 am

Oh, that was fun! I liked it! >:D

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Barbara McDowell link
9/7/2011 05:42:26 am

Good and dark. Love stories like this. I do wonder what has made her that tough. You can definitely expand this. Great job!

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theGlitterlady link
9/7/2011 07:06:44 am

that is some kind of creepy there. And yet I am intrigued to see if she out smarts him in some way... maybe she is breaking him? Pet reversal maybe?

Great job!

Your fellow YA group campaigner & entry #251 of this weeks challenge

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Ryann link
9/7/2011 10:11:52 am

WOW! LOVE IT LOVE IT! Nicely done. You get my vote.

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Nellie
9/7/2011 11:16:54 am

Oooo, very interesting!

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Angela Orlowski-Peart link
9/7/2011 12:30:41 pm

Creepy but in a great way. Love the voice and the female character - "unbreakable" takes this story to the whole different level!

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Alica link
9/7/2011 02:49:59 pm

This gave me the shivers great job

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Catherine A. Winn link
9/8/2011 12:41:20 am

I got shivers, too! Love that!

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Emilia Quill link
9/8/2011 01:25:47 am

I think she's probably going to attack him some day, steal the keys, unchain herself then chain him up.

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D.T. Conklin link
9/8/2011 01:41:13 am

This is super awesome.

The thing I hate about these kinds of things is that they are really just popularity contests. I'm sitting here, browsing through some of the other entries, and they are of far inferior quality. They don't tell an interesting story. Heck, in many instances their prose is sloppy and mishandled. Maybe I'm just picky on points like that. However, they've managed to coerce more people into voting.

Boo on that!

On another note, as it pertains to this actual story: I think she actually likes being there. Twisted? Perhaps, but your use of sentences like, "I smiled too, an equally perverse smile to match his own." Yeah, that's why. It's almost as if she wants to have him break her, but she can't tell him that, because it would ruin the game.

Everything else aside, this is a spectacular 200 words.

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Callie Kingston link
9/8/2011 11:58:11 am

You've made the shortlist. Congrats!

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Jody Moller link
9/8/2011 02:24:08 pm

I absolutely LOVE this piece. True it would have been better if it had another 1000 words attached to the end so we can actually find out what happened, but the tension is incredible! I love a tough female protag!

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Sandwiched Writer link
9/9/2011 02:31:24 am

Fellow campaigner here! I love this chick!

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CherylAnne Ham link
9/9/2011 03:22:04 am

Intense. I loved it. Great job. :D

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Angelina C. Hansen link
9/9/2011 12:50:17 pm

Love this feisty character.

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Jessica Love link
9/9/2011 01:34:17 pm

Oooh, she's a tough little cookie! I love it.

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Elena Aitken link
9/10/2011 12:59:17 am

Loved it, Angela!
Nicely done and totally different from so many others. Good, strong work!

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Claire link
9/10/2011 03:52:26 pm

Wow, very exciting story. Love a strong woman too. You got so much atmosphere into such a short space. Excellent :)

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Elaine link
9/10/2011 07:12:52 pm

Scary, your story sent chills through me. That is some power struggle you have set up here, I think you have created two characters I would want to read more about.
Good luck with the challenge.

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